Hey, nice job! I don't know if I agree with the others on this. I love fusions, and from what I could hear, no sour notes.I think what it lacks the most is that the song lacks a climax, a real chorus to counteract the quiet piano parts. Don't be afraid to take your songs into new directions, it really adds flavor!

Also take this cnc with a grain of salt, I only listened to the song once. Good shit!