I hate being an asshole but dude. I just read you "translation". I'm sorry but you need to try a little harder than what you've done so far.
Really, I don't think people deserve 300k tc for using a translator to directly translate word for word imo.

You said your Japanese teacher checked it... If he did, he needs to be sacked.

I know I'm being harsh and you'll probably hate me, but it's true.


I'll work on a Japanese version sometime soon.