Pixelated mess. Looks like someone wrote the text down with a shitty font, slapped some tribal brushes on it and raped it with filters.
In other words, it's rather poorly designed.
The rest of the thread is boring like any other thread I guess. The only special thing about it is the moving shenanigans.
I don't like the story because it tends to repeat information I know already. Saying that the protagonist is a man does not add to the tension. And how many times do you need to tell me that a person is a witch doctor?
Also whatever happened to the great being that lived among monstrous beasts? You mention it but don't follow up on it. Why mention it at all?
Less descriptions, more action. Dis ain't 10k BC y0

I will say, however, that your thread is better organized than this one. The first post of this thread is pretty terrible to look at. There should never be images than text. Particularly when the images have next to zero value for the reader and cannot be found with the browser's search function (headlines).
8/