its good, and ill give you credit because that was all done in the iphone. Question... why no more lyrics after the break in the middle? or is it just not done? Also it would be worth it to not have the voice be choppy and inconsistent like at 1:15 how the word "hand" is lower it just throws off the flow. Also that distorted effect thats at the end just sounded bad because it didn't match the first half(imo at least)

but yeah its still good man like honestly for just using an iphone and garage band its really cool.