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[Poem]Tori Community
A poem I made regarding the community from my experience :P.
It's not that good of a poem,but I worked Hard :P
It's not that good of a poem,but I worked Hard :P
Toribash Community
For I am a newcomer
Nor a hero,or star.
To tell you the truth
I found this game hard.
I thought that I truly
understood physics.
Velocity,momentum,(Yeah,I think you get it)
But I sha'll not quit,
no matter how hard.
Because my dream is
to be a tori-star.
I will practice and practice,
maybe practice some more.
I will keep on practicing
until my fingers are sore.
Then when I am ready,
i'll fight for my dream.
No matter how complicating
it may seem.
I will enter events,
bets and tourney's.
Fight to my heart's content
Finishing thoroughly.
Ill hear a few cheers,
Smiling brightly.
But then I will see,
something unsightly.
I'll see a few messages,
Incredibly rude chat.
Ones that say "Noob luck",
or "You f*cking Fatass!".
I'll feel slightly down,
Maybe frustrated.
I didn't know,
That I would get hated.
I then see a light,
the heavenly gate.
The words from a pro,
"Dude.Hater's Gunna hate :]".
I then flashed a smile,
Feeling a lot better.
I know for a fact,
My opponent was a bed wetter.
So I then took a bow,
Still not very far.
But I still knew...
I'd be a Toribash Star.
~Tamakuu
For I am a newcomer
Nor a hero,or star.
To tell you the truth
I found this game hard.
I thought that I truly
understood physics.
Velocity,momentum,(Yeah,I think you get it)
But I sha'll not quit,
no matter how hard.
Because my dream is
to be a tori-star.
I will practice and practice,
maybe practice some more.
I will keep on practicing
until my fingers are sore.
Then when I am ready,
i'll fight for my dream.
No matter how complicating
it may seem.
I will enter events,
bets and tourney's.
Fight to my heart's content
Finishing thoroughly.
Ill hear a few cheers,
Smiling brightly.
But then I will see,
something unsightly.
I'll see a few messages,
Incredibly rude chat.
Ones that say "Noob luck",
or "You f*cking Fatass!".
I'll feel slightly down,
Maybe frustrated.
I didn't know,
That I would get hated.
I then see a light,
the heavenly gate.
The words from a pro,
"Dude.Hater's Gunna hate :]".
I then flashed a smile,
Feeling a lot better.
I know for a fact,
My opponent was a bed wetter.
So I then took a bow,
Still not very far.
But I still knew...
I'd be a Toribash Star.
~Tamakuu
Last edited by Marrez; Aug 25, 2011 at 07:07 PM.
beware
the goblin
I really tried hard to think about some C&C that would be smart and constructive, but whenever I read your poem I see this:
That I had a few laughs throughout the poem, nothing profound. But you described the ''Never-ending story'' of ppl that play TB quite accurate. A Bit naive, but ok...
We don't see much poems here and some of us (read: me), are not a poetic souls, so... Wait a better judgement. :]
I will practice and practice,
maybe practice some more.
I will keep on practicing
until my fingers are sore.
This sounded as a part from some 80es ballade. I can see Foreigner performing it. :}
We don't see much poems here and some of us (read: me), are not a poetic souls, so... Wait a better judgement. :]
I will practice and practice,
maybe practice some more.
I will keep on practicing
until my fingers are sore.
This sounded as a part from some 80es ballade. I can see Foreigner performing it. :}