Marshmall.tbm
The opener is alright, I am fond of wushu-style openers where you just do it and then skip a few turns and see how it plays out. At 460 you suddenly switch rotation, which I think was either little too early or unnecessary. If you let yourself fall down a bit more you'd get a lot more spin from that.
I quite like the little spin at 440-420 with both legs extended. The kick-off from the ground was a bit too early again in my opinion, but it might be just me being picky. Chest kick would've looked better if you had done it with your other leg to keep the rotation going, plus the contract-extend move you did looked a bit forced. Right after the lift kick you immediately contract the knee for a kew frames which looks odd.
Knee kick looks great, has nice angle and speed. The second hit I am not a big fan of. I think you should've put more speed into it, and either backhand or punch uke's head. One more thing, Try and move more between the hits. Right now it seems like you go slow for most of the replay after the opener and then speed up right before the hits.
Posing sequence was a nice touch, don't have anything negative to say about that. Good job!
Blues.tbm
I like this replay a lot more and it has less flaws, so I have to get more picky.
During the opener you have your left leg slightly contracted, but at around 450 you suddenly extend it. It would look a lot nicer if you kept it like that, extended it during the opener, or extended it slower.
During the second kick, I like that you didn't use grabs, but the kick itself looked dirty because of how you kicked uke's torso with your shin before the decap. Right afterwards you rushed the wrist dm, but then didn't do anything with it and kinda just froze for 50 frames. You could've went for the DM later, do the whole sequence slower, or do some movement while in mid-air. The skeet itself was nice, I like how you had extra room to continue the arm movement afterwards. After that you twitch a little bit while getting into balance, but thats a minor complaint. Solid replay.
The opener is alright, I am fond of wushu-style openers where you just do it and then skip a few turns and see how it plays out. At 460 you suddenly switch rotation, which I think was either little too early or unnecessary. If you let yourself fall down a bit more you'd get a lot more spin from that.
I quite like the little spin at 440-420 with both legs extended. The kick-off from the ground was a bit too early again in my opinion, but it might be just me being picky. Chest kick would've looked better if you had done it with your other leg to keep the rotation going, plus the contract-extend move you did looked a bit forced. Right after the lift kick you immediately contract the knee for a kew frames which looks odd.
Knee kick looks great, has nice angle and speed. The second hit I am not a big fan of. I think you should've put more speed into it, and either backhand or punch uke's head. One more thing, Try and move more between the hits. Right now it seems like you go slow for most of the replay after the opener and then speed up right before the hits.
Posing sequence was a nice touch, don't have anything negative to say about that. Good job!
Blues.tbm
I like this replay a lot more and it has less flaws, so I have to get more picky.
During the opener you have your left leg slightly contracted, but at around 450 you suddenly extend it. It would look a lot nicer if you kept it like that, extended it during the opener, or extended it slower.
During the second kick, I like that you didn't use grabs, but the kick itself looked dirty because of how you kicked uke's torso with your shin before the decap. Right afterwards you rushed the wrist dm, but then didn't do anything with it and kinda just froze for 50 frames. You could've went for the DM later, do the whole sequence slower, or do some movement while in mid-air. The skeet itself was nice, I like how you had extra room to continue the arm movement afterwards. After that you twitch a little bit while getting into balance, but thats a minor complaint. Solid replay.
golf
marshall
its not bad opener i dont like where you turn around you lose momentium you couldve done a swing or smth the rest is ok not much to say i feel like you couldve done smth better like double knee or continue a manip
not bad overall not much to say just work on movement and make good looking replays smoothly
its not bad opener i dont like where you turn around you lose momentium you couldve done a swing or smth the rest is ok not much to say i feel like you couldve done smth better like double knee or continue a manip
not bad overall not much to say just work on movement and make good looking replays smoothly
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