The problem I keep having with editing your opener to make it better Star is how vulnerable you are at the start. I don't think it's generic, so your fine there, but turn 1 your head gets pretty vulnerable, and then frames 450-to almost 400 your head is like, right where the majority of even not rush opener would be hitting, so the only thing I though up off was editing it slightly so it has a 3rd turn kick as well. Sorry for no large improvements, will keep working at it.
Last edited by Bodhisattva; Jan 28, 2016 at 01:59 AM.