Toribash
Originally Posted by keoni109 View Post
Great. One thing, add a proper introduction. I can see what you're trying to do, you're trying to emotionally attach us with the video with that music. You know what would really help? Landscape shots, closeups, anything to change up the subject. One thing i would advise, is not to start any video off with replays, unless its a player showcase. Before you show any replays, you should include some video shots of a tori sitting on a box, or a closeup of the tori's face. Small things like these will make your video go a long way. If you look at videos like taylor swift's music video, you will see she takes up an entire 3 minutes just to establish the mood, then to go into the music. Its a magical moment when a video artist like yourself can do these sort of things.

I understand what do you want to mean and i share your ideas. But I prefer to keep that kind of idea for futur projects, like Brother of Agility 3 ;)

My Youtube channel : Mocucha Toribash

smoke still kinda non fitting..but i guess that's ur choice
1:11 1: 33 lovely effect,really works well with the vid!
that shader change was fucking genius on 2:01
font changed maybe??but u need to use a different color ewww

overall: this is a new style of vids from you and you're making it work really well!
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Originally Posted by William View Post
smoke still kinda non fitting..but i guess that's ur choice
1:11 1: 33 lovely effect,really works well with the vid!
that shader change was fucking genius on 2:01
font changed maybe??but u need to use a different color ewww

overall: this is a new style of vids from you and you're making it work really well!


The font IS changed, it was already changed in previous wip... (love that smiley). I agree for the smoke, i am still working on it ;) Thanks for comment.

My Youtube channel : Mocucha Toribash

Originally Posted by Mocucha View Post
The font IS changed, it was already changed in previous wip... (love that smiley). I agree for the smoke, i am still working on it ;) Thanks for comment.

YES I didn't notice it because you are still using the same HORRIBLE COLOR
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Originally Posted by BenDover View Post
looking pretty fantastic
camera work and replays are awesome
that replay at 2:02 was just great
colour correction was good, it enhanced the video rather than changed it.

that said, i think as a player showcase vid, you are going about it 100% the right way, the replays really are the star of the show.
and as a visual piece, this is by far my favorite video of yours.

still not feeling the smoke, i dont think it fits with the video, nevermind that it has no depth.
i would try making the intro font a little less severe, try sticking to a more neutral font and just dropping the opacity on it down to 50-75% and remove that funny effect thing. Text isnt your strong point, so just try make it less intense.

agreeed^ but color in font is horrible too :P

and the smoke has no place there..it's not just the look of it.
Last edited by William; Apr 18, 2013 at 06:19 PM. Reason: <24 hour edit/bump
Your messed up world enthrills me
Ok ok, i will work more that smoke, i have other models too, i will see. Maybe just put an other kind of particles.

Greys font, large's force color ?

My Youtube channel : Mocucha Toribash

yeah look at the screenshot i gave u, it's fairly better..you can even apply some effect. what i'm sure of is that the current one is 100percent horrible. putting black with times new roman font is better ;P
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Originally Posted by JackerFx View Post
Its good, but not that good.
Things you could improve on is getting the tori to flow with the music a big more
instead of switching scenes every 5 seconds cause that de-synconizes the music and the movement made by the tori.

other improvements you could of done is adjust the lighting in the video,
the camera flare makes it a bit hard to see the tori and the shadows is too much and covers up much of the detail and really hard to see the tori.

Other things I think would be great to the video is if you change it to first person once and a while instead of recording in one position. Also the
smoke effect is pretty cool but you should make it a bit more visible in the video. In the future maybe you could change the landscape or something
and texturize the floor and give it a setting.


but overall not bad.

Thanks for your comments. For your switching scenery and camera shadow, i just don't know what you are talking about. Are we talking about the same video ?

Recording in first person SUCKS. That's make a lot of bugs and the perspective is wrong.

Texturize the ground... >_>' ... I will just say nothing about that.

Originally Posted by iPoor View Post
1. IDK what is the purpose of the vid, is it just showing largekilla's good videos?
2. less narrative, do you rlly just want to show largekilla's good videos? I mean, yeah I've seen your vid such as brother of agility etc. Those videos have a good narrative wich make us want to know "Oh sshii, he lost. what will happen to the f*cking world if he died?" and a good narrative also make us emotional "F*ck off demon! you can't beat him just give up!" and this video, IN MY OPINION, it's boring
3. is it a combine plot? I mean the video is like solo trick-parkour-destroying uke-spar with uke-parkour, you didn't pick it randomly right?
4. in 27-30 there are 2 suns/light source. it's kinda confusing especially the little sun. it shows from out of no where and it's kinda shocking me, in fact when it shows I was like "what's that?" I don't lie. why? becoz it's like Boom! a little sun comes up and reflecting a light.
5. for the music, unfortunately, my speakers are crashed so I can't hear it

-I like the bg wich is fit to largekilla's tori, I mean his set and his joints
-nice camera movement

*NOTE : you were asking for our opinion so this is my opinion, don't be angry.


So, you are saying the video is boring because there isnt any scenario.... But, it is a "music video" and you havent any speakers... So, first, watch the video in REAL conditions before starting commenting.




Sorry guys, i have nothing with all kind of comments, but your both comments are pretty weirds.

My Youtube channel : Mocucha Toribash

Oh god, those last two comments. Really guys? really!?
-implying that every vid needs a narrative not to be boring
-implying that you should keep the scene for 1minute so it runs with the music?(idk wtf ur talking about, it fits fine)
-implying that recording in first person is actually!(guess what it's not!)
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Originally Posted by iPoor View Post
dude..
it's my opinion, everyone have a different opinion about it and I stick itnto my opinion.
I told you the fact that I got bored when I watch the video I mean I think it's better to get largekilla's replay and watch it while I'm hearing a music

I know that's your opinion, what could it be else? The fact is that this video is made to follow the music, what is the value of your opinion, since you told me not to have it?

So, about story line, only brother of aglity 1 & 2 + Fallen shadow are ok, all other toribash videos are boring. I keep the idea your opinion is weird.

My Youtube channel : Mocucha Toribash