Some friendly criticism for Bercat, Embry, and Miss.


Bercat....
"I'll call you fender bender, cuz you are a big mishap." normal metaphor cliche
"You have the same mentality as a faggot in a jeep." you'll have to explain this one to me because Jeep is a good brand except for the fact that most of their models look the same.

Ohhhhh i see you just needed something to rhyme with this :/ "Like the grim reaper, I leave bodies in a heap."

"Call me sandman mothafucka, I'll put your dopey ass to sleep." Lol this made me laugh

Miss...
As soon as i saw this "Young Egg" i knew this was coming "BATTLE ME NOW SO I CAN SET YOUR ABORTION."
First time ive ever herd or seen this word used in any rap of any kind "So you better skedaddle,"

Embry...
"I mention Bercat so much cuz I notice him as a brother." Awww ;-; but ive only every seen you mention him three times in three raps ever the third time you were rapping against him.

"What I see there is no bigger than Genesee River Cod." really you have to be from this area to even get this metaphor

"Hype the hell out yourself do you think you're a fucking god?"
I asked her. her responce Quote for Quote was : (._.) (l: ) (.-.) ( :l) (._.) they see me rollin they hatin'

The Origin Anthem
So I had an idea where we all get together and make a Rap for origin against everyone who may come here who isn't origin. Everyone who wants to be in the anthem should write up their parts with the title The Origin Anthem above it. Make sure it transitions well so it doesn't turn up all choppy when It comes together.

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This is all lyrical.
There is somethin spiritual
Keepin faith on the table
Waiting for that one record label
The struggle is as real as havin cable
But not givin up, goin stay stable.
Keepin a fine line between the hate and likes
Because I'm so lost that I can't see the lights
Always in fights, but its aite
Cause life ain't right unless u stay tight
A firm grip on living strong
That's why I'm writing this song
Emotions spilling out onto words
Writing up lyrics that makes sense
Just wondering why I'm not famous
Why am I looked at as the lamest?
I'm just under estimated
Used to always be faded
Always was the turn up type
Now I'm the calm and collected type...

missfate, alot of that reminds me of Dan bulls skyrim rap... :P

But Ber, we've lost a good number of times. ;-;

tru tru tru

This is the crew, this is origin
blowing off haters like Jordan
Can't even say we are all american
because most of us are foriegn
But that doesn't change the family status
We can say some wars done had us
and some of them done made us
This is a anthem of the crew
Making everyone have a clue
How we went from many to only a few
because you can tell that time has flew
It's almost impossible to break through
But we can nail down the god damn screw
by saying we are good, and how we grew
it's not my fault that you never knew.
Haters always hating and invading
getting sick and tired of this raiding
It's time we start planning
And start busting out instead of trading
Doing this as a family, it's aching
So we can say we are changing
Always working together as a group

First of all, I'm not a rapper.

Your rhymes are so bad,
it doesn't even matter
what I bring down here
your face will shatter,
even with the lowest skill
you will frikkin pay your bill,
bringing down the tallest man
killing more than you think I can,
I slam everything thats in my way,
My name is zockinator,
if you want to know what to do,
ask me later.

Bang, bo, ba da, boom, POW! OOOOOOOOOOOOOH

Im not a rapper.

You want the tallest man? Then bitch look this direction.
This petty ass rap barely brings down my erection.
A man is only as good as his latent affection.
So putting smut on our forum is a sure fire reflection.
You not being a rapper is pretty noticeable.
Not one thing you've said here is nearly quotable.
I feel more stimulated reading comics on Playstation Portable.
You're attempted rhyme against Origin is plain horrible.
Although I'm hunched over emotionally thinking,
Eyes glued to my fucking monitor, even drinking.
I will still throw shots at your boat, and leave you sinking.
Wipe you off the planet within the time of you blinking.

t.
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I'm on my knees lookin up to the sky
Asking the world when and why?
Seeing the struggle of a nobody.
The one with a dream to be a somebody
Crew has his back, going all the way.
Waiting for that one simple day
Walking out in front of millions
Ready to make these riches
Because it's not about the bitches
but about the family and the game
So you can say we ready for the fame
Time to live in a 5 star hotel
Waiting for the manager to give a call
Going on stage and yell
Walking down that hall
It's our game
It's our time. ‪#‎MMS‬

If you want to call out the CEO of Money Makin' Squad, be my guest.